我的翻译作业：
Bidding Farewell in the Mountains
By Wang Wei
In the mountains,I see you off at my wicker gate,
And I stand there with it open until the dark falls.
When the grass turn green next spring,
Will you，my friend,
Travel to be my guest again?
原文：
山中相送
王维
山中相送罢
日暮掩柴扉
春草明年绿
王孙归不归
参考1（许渊冲译）：
parting among the hills
i watch you leave the hills, compeer;
at dust i close my wicker door,
when grass turns green in spring next year,
will you return with spring once more?
参考2（Hans Frankel）
seeing off a friend
in the mountainns,after seeing you off,
at sunset i close the brushwood gate,
the spring grass will be green again next year,
will you, my prince, return or ot?
老师留作业时并没有提供参考资料。我怕翻译的太烂，就先找来前辈的翻译看看，一共找到三首，另一首王大濂译的与上面两首大同小异，但略逊，懒得打了。
前两次作业是翻译成语，图省事抄现成的，结果被老师骂了，这次不敢抄了。
请高手指点一下我的翻译里哪些地方可以改得更地道一点？
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